Go through each scene and evaluate each of these questions:
Whose scene is it?
Who is dominant in the scene?
Who has power in the scene?
Is there a shift of power within the scene?
What conflict generates the action of the scene?
Does the scene escalate in tension giving a forward momentum of story?
Are new elements of character revealed in conflict?
Is the dialogue interesting?
Have you deleted cliches?
Have you corrected format?
Have you cleaned up punctuation and grammar?
Did you present the narrative with clarity and brevity?
Is the final line of dialogue, “the tag”, in place to anchor the scene and form a hook for the next scene?
Did you begin at the last moment and exit at the highest point of drama?
Did you play with the dialogue? Finding a more interesting and compelling line delivery?
Is the dialogue about conflict?
Does the dialogue reveal character?
Is the dialogue easy to read and deliver?
MORE REWRITE TIPS:
Check scenes at the act breaks. Make them work.
Don’t trust the first joke if you’re writing a comedy.
Delete repeat lines.
Monitor characters. Do you have too many characters that are doing redundant work and deflating the conflict?
Do you need more characters?